Writing Homework Six Student Two

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The Hippocratic Oath
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“I will follow that system of regimen which, according to my ability and judgment, I consider for the benefit of my patients, and abstain from whatever is deleterious and mischievous. I will give no deadly medicine to any one if asked, nor suggest any such counsel; and in like manner I will not give to a woman a pessary to produce abortion.” This is the famous quote which has been handed down to medical students throughout the centuries. The Hippocratic Oath was issued by a man named Hippocrates [THIS SENTENCE SEEMS OBVIOUS, AND THUS SHOULD NOT BE A STANDALONE SENTENCE BUT SHOULD BE COMBINED WITH THE NEXT SENTENCE]. Hippocrates was considered by many to be the father of modern day medicine. This oath is recited by graduating medical students all over the world. [NOT SO MUCH ANY MORE, UNFORTUNATELY, AT LEAST NOT IN ITS STRONG FORM] It sets the standard for the code of conduct which all medical students are to abide by. It also gives an insight into the lives of the Ancient Greeks. Through its history, the Hippocratic Oath tells a story of age-old medicine. Thanks to Ancient Greece, the world now has an amazing medical field, which due to the advances in technology, is becoming better every day. [TERRIFIC WRITING]
Hippocrates, who was born in the island of Cos between 470 and 460 B.C., is commonly known as the founding father of modern medicine [REPETITIVE - SIMILAR SENTENCE IS IN THE FIRST PARAGRAPH]. He was a classic example of what a physician should be. He came from a family who claimed direct descendant from the Greek gods Æsculapius and Apollo. These two gods were very important [COULD USE BETTER VOCABULARY THAN "VERY IMPORTANT" HERE] to the ancient Greeks because Æsculapius and Apollo both played an important role in medicine and the well being of the person. Æsculapius was the ancient god of medicine. He was born to a mortal and was trained as a physician. He became extremely skilled in his practice of medicine. He was so talented that he was believed to have the power to resurrect people from the dead. Later on, the Greek god Apollo rescued Æsculapius from the wrath of Hades. Apollo made Æsculapius the god of Olympus and he became a great physician to the gods. It was very important [HERE IS "VERY IMPORTANT" AGAIN] for the Greeks to claim descent from a god, because they worshiped the gods with everything they had in them. This background information about Hippocrates family assists us in understanding his importance in the field of medicine.
Due to his knowledge of the subject, Hippocrates produced many influential medical writings throughout his life. [GOOD] He also helped to end the great plague of Athens during the second year of the Peloponnesian War (430 B.C.)[NEED PERIOD AND SPACE HERE]He set great fires as disinfectants and engaged in other treatments. Even though there is evidence that some form of a physician’s guild had already been established, Hippocrates popularized the concepts which all medical professionals were to follow. A famous quote from Hippocrates which has been passed down throughout the years really sums up his personal feelings for the work of the medical profession. "Life is short, and the Art long; the occasion fleeting; experience fallacious, and judgment difficult. The physician must not only be prepared to do what is right himself, but also to make the patient, the attendants, and externals cooperate." He summed up the job of a doctor in a few short lines. These words which Hippocrates has coined genuinely show forth the true meaning of what it means to work in the world of healthcare.
The Hippocratic Oath is a classic example of what the medical field is supposed to be. The different parts of this oath show forth what doctors and nurses should do and who they should be as a person of medicine. The original translation of this oath was pledged to the mythological gods of Ancient Greece, Apollo the physician and Æsculapius the god of medicine. However, the newer translation has changed in some way. It is more of a pledge to the medical professionals and their patients rather than a pledge to any god. “I will follow that system of regimen which, according to my ability and judgment, I consider for the benefit of my patients, and abstain from whatever is deleterious and mischievous.” This section of the Hippocratic Oath is a clear statement of the just treatments which patients should receive from their caregivers. Doctors and nurses need to use their best judgment when deciding on how to treat their patients. Medical professionals need to put into practice the intense schooling which they have received. Medical school is not easy and healthcare providers need to exhibit their knowledge of the subject when treating their patients. The Hippocratic Oath is a code of conduct which has set the standard for medicine. Without this important Oath, the field of medicine would be completely different.
In the world of today, medical professionals are diminishing the value of human life. [TERRIFIC OPENING SENTENCE] Doctors and nurses seem to completely miss the real purpose of their profession. The central objective of healthcare is to help people, not to harm them. With the rise in abortion and physician assisted suicide, our world is living in a culture of death which is only becoming worse. The second part of the Hippocratic Oath is something which seems to be thrown aside by many modern day physicians. “I will give no deadly medicine to any one if asked, nor suggest any such counsel; and in like manner I will not give to a woman a pessary to produce abortion.” Doctors are supposed to ["ARE SUPPOSED TO" -> "SHOULD"] use their knowledge of the human body to assist their patients. Doctors and nurses need to use their science to promote good health for their patients, not to assist them in any anti-life agenda. The Hippocratic Oath states very clearly that people of the medical profession need to remember their main purpose in healthcare. They need to recall that a supreme being has created them and has given them the authority to assist in the wonderful plan of continuing and bettering creation. Consequently doctors and nurses need to return to the origins of the Hippocratic Oath to better understand the roles which they play in this world.
So many medical professionals become caught up in the small details of their jobs instead of focusing on the important aspects of it. Many doctors and nurses do not fully realize how important their task of caring for people really is. They are the ones who call the shots, they are the ones who play a vital role in who lives or dies. The choices they make affect lives, or in some cases deaths. People who work in the medical field have a huge responsibility in their work. That is why they have to go through intense schooling to be able to practice medicine. It is not an easy field of study to pursue. Some things need to be sacrificed. Due to its intense and rigorous academics, many students drop out of their medical studies because it is too difficult and they have to sacrifice much. The medical field is indeed a very important field which is vital to the continuation of human well being, but it is also something which is not to be taken lightly. The Hippocratic Oath exhibits the seriousness of this field of study. It portrays how important the role of the physician truly is.
Thanks to Hippocrates and his Hippocratic Oath, our world has something to base the important principles of medicine upon [BETTER: "UPON WHICH TO BASE THE IMPORTANT PRINCIPLES OF MEDICINE"]. Without these codes of conduct, there would be no order whatsoever in the medical field. It is so important for doctors and nurses to consider the Hippocratic Oath and its history before and after school. It is a constant reminder to them of how to be a better doctor or nurse. Hippocrates showed what it really meant to be a doctor. He influenced not only the people whom he cared for, but he influenced and is still influencing the lives of people today. Healthcare is not an easy field, but if done with the right convictions, it can be the most rewarding job on earth. [SUPERB ENDING]

Alexa W

Terrific substance: 10/10. The technical aspects of this essay could be improved, as noted above: 9.6/10.--Andy Schlafly 10:32, 22 March 2012 (EDT)
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