:Your essay has much good substance in it, but areas for improvement as noted above. Substance: 9.7. Technical: 9.3.--[[User:Aschlafly|Andy Schlafly]] 14:26, 26 February 2012 (EST) | :Your essay has much good substance in it, but areas for improvement as noted above. Substance: 9.7. Technical: 9.3.--[[User:Aschlafly|Andy Schlafly]] 14:26, 26 February 2012 (EST) |