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Alexa W

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Raw Foods: the Forgotten Medicine.<blockquote>

Raw Foods: the Forgotten Medicine.<blockquote> [TERRIFIC TITLE]

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“You are what you eat.” This phrase which seems so common and over used by numerous people has clearly taken on a new meaning for Alice Benedetto. While working as a visiting nurse, Benedetto learned just how important food really was in people’s lives. <blockquote>

“You are what you eat.” [GOOD OPENING SENTENCE] This phrase which [THAT] seems so common and over used [ONE WORD: OVERUSED] by numerous people has clearly taken on a new meaning for Alice Benedetto. While working as a visiting nurse, Benedetto learned just how important food really was in people’s lives. <blockquote>

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Ignited with the idea that food is an important part of bodily health and wellness, Benedetto made up her mind to create a line of healthful eating and tasty nutritious raw foods. Her idea took root and became a global success instantly. Hence Raw Revolution was born.<blockquote>

Ignited with the idea that food is an important part of bodily health and wellness, Benedetto made up her mind to create a line of healthful eating and tasty nutritious raw foods. [EXCELLENT (PRIOR) SENTENCE] Her idea took root and became a global success instantly. Hence Raw Revolution was born.<blockquote>

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During her seven years of working as a visiting nurse in Ardsley New York, Benedetto perceived the lack of nutrition which her patients suffered from. Often chronic illnesses and health problems sparked from an imbalanced and in-nutritious diet. Benedetto said that food is like medicine and that our bodies react to food and drink in the same way which our bodies respond to medications.<blockquote>

During her seven years of working as a visiting nurse in Ardsley[COMMA] New York, Benedetto perceived the lack of nutrition [FROM] which her patients suffered from [MOVE THIS "FROM" TO BEFORE "WHICH"]. Often chronic illnesses and health problems sparked from an imbalanced and in-nutritious diet. Benedetto said that food is like medicine and that our bodies react to food and drink in the same way which [THAT] our bodies respond to medications.<blockquote>

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When she gave birth to her first child, Benedetto knew that healthy eating habits start at an early age. She searched high and low for healthful alternatives to processed baby foods but found nothing. <blockquote>

When she gave birth to her first child, Benedetto knew that healthy eating habits start at an early age. She searched high and low for healthful alternatives to processed baby foods[COMMA] but found nothing. <blockquote>

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In 2003, Benedetto piloted the launch of her company Raw Revolutions. Her days off were filled with buying new ingredients, trying new recipes and making her bars. Weekends were filled with long hours of hard, often times unfruitful work. But, after success had ultimately become a reality, the business which she had dreamed of had finally taken off.<blockquote>

In 2003, Benedetto piloted the launch of her company Raw Revolutions. Her days off were filled with buying new ingredients, trying new recipes and making her bars. Weekends were filled with long hours of hard, often times ["TIMES" IS UNNECESSARY] unfruitful work. But, after success had ultimately become a reality, the business [OF] which she had dreamed of [MOVE "OF" TO BEFORE "WHICH"] had finally taken off.<blockquote>

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Benedetto also credits her management and leadership skills to her nursing education. By working with people, a business becomes a success. Nursing is a team sport much the same as it is in a business. The success of a procedure counts on the cooperation of all the members of the team. <blockquote>

Benedetto also credits her management and leadership skills to her nursing education. By working with people, a business [AWKWARD: DOES "A BUSINESS" WORK WITH PEOPLE?] becomes a success. Nursing is a team sport much the same as it is in a business. The success of a procedure counts on the cooperation of all the members of the team. <blockquote>

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Although Benedetto keeps extremely busy with her company decisions and her new recipes, she always remembers to set aside time to spend with her family, especially with her two children. She knows that another important aspect to good health is a safe haven to come home to at the end of a busy day: a place of security.<blockquote>

Although Benedetto keeps extremely busy with her company decisions and her new recipes, she always remembers to set aside time to spend with her family, especially with her two children. She knows that another important aspect to good health is a safe haven to come home to at the end of a busy day: a place of security. [GOOD WRITING]<blockquote>

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Even though she does not currently work as a nurse, Benedetto would like to go back to her job in the near future. Nursing, which is a challenging profession, has certainly assisted Benedetto in her creation and continuation of Raw Revolution. All of the skills which she learned in nursing school and her years as a visiting nurse have helped to make Benedetto’s dream a reality. Thanks to Benedetto’s nifty innovation, many people will now have the opportunity to eat themselves to wellness.

Even though she does not currently work as a nurse, Benedetto would like to go back to her job in the near future. Nursing, which is a challenging profession, has certainly assisted Benedetto in her creation and continuation of Raw Revolution. All of the skills which she learned in nursing school and her years as a visiting nurse have helped to make Benedetto’s dream a reality. Thanks to Benedetto’s nifty innovation, many people will now have the opportunity to eat themselves to wellness.