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:I would add that the kind of comments made in the following sentence would be more appropriately dealt with in the body of the article, with a more general comment on the beauty, etc of the Bible in the lead: "It includes the beautiful Gospel of Luke, the profound Gospel of John, and the intellectual Epistle to the Hebrews." That is "It is a work that contains profound and beautiful writing". Intellectual is presumably covered by profound? --[[User:Jackin the box|Jackin the box]] ([[User talk:Jackin the box|talk]]) 09:40, February 11, 2022 (EST)
:I would add that the kind of comments made in the following sentence would be more appropriately dealt with in the body of the article, with a more general comment on the beauty, etc of the Bible in the lead: "It includes the beautiful Gospel of Luke, the profound Gospel of John, and the intellectual Epistle to the Hebrews." That is "It is a work that contains profound and beautiful writing". Intellectual is presumably covered by profound? --[[User:Jackin the box|Jackin the box]] ([[User talk:Jackin the box|talk]]) 09:40, February 11, 2022 (EST)
::Geez, I don't know what to tell ya. Howabout proposing alternative language here? [[User:RobSmith|RobS]]<sup>[[User talk:RobSmith|Let's Go Brandon!]]</sup> 11:49, February 11, 2022 (EST)