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:* 'Although the terms of the treaty were never fully enforced' Along with your other wording this can imply that the conditions were relatively minor. If you are going to say they were never fully enforced, then you need to describe just what was enforced, such as the French occupying the German factories and the shooting of German workers who walked off the job in protest.
:* 'Although the terms of the treaty were never fully enforced' Along with your other wording this can imply that the conditions were relatively minor. If you are going to say they were never fully enforced, then you need to describe just what was enforced, such as the French occupying the German factories and the shooting of German workers who walked off the job in protest.
::Were the terms fully enforced, or weren't they? If you think that there is information missing on the Ruhr occupation add it, but it factually correct that the full terms were in the end not enforced.
:* 'The republic was also struggling with the rejection by monarchists' Firstly, you haven't yet discussed the Republic so you're bringing it up before introducing it. Secondly, this appears to be rather unimportant as the monarchists didn't stage a coup or any other direct confrontation. All governments have their opponents, especially after government changes.
:* 'The republic was also struggling with the rejection by monarchists' Firstly, you haven't yet discussed the Republic so you're bringing it up before introducing it. Secondly, this appears to be rather unimportant as the monarchists didn't stage a coup or any other direct confrontation. All governments have their opponents, especially after government changes.
::For the Weimar Republic this was a problem, because it was rejected by large parts of the elite. Sure the monarchists didn't stage a coup, but the election of Hindenburg as president was supported by monarchists, and people nostalhic for the good old times.
:* 'economic resurgence' That reminds me of when Priceline went from $80 to $1.25, and then back to $1.50. I suppose the move from $1.25 to $1.50 could be described as an economic resurgence. And again, you describe the resurgence before you describe the crisis, so it is the wrong order.
:* 'economic resurgence' That reminds me of when Priceline went from $80 to $1.25, and then back to $1.50. I suppose the move from $1.25 to $1.50 could be described as an economic resurgence. And again, you describe the resurgence before you describe the crisis, so it is the wrong order.
The economy in Weimar grew from RM 70 billion in 1925 to RM 88 billion in 1928, more than 20 percent in 4 years. This period is know as the golden years of Weimar, and for a good reason.
:* 'great depression... Adolf Hitler to rise up on the scene...' Hitler was active well before the great depression and the conditions that allowed him to be active existed before the Great Depression. This skirts the first 10 years of hardship in Germany from the end of WWI until the Depression itself.
:* 'great depression... Adolf Hitler to rise up on the scene...' Hitler was active well before the great depression and the conditions that allowed him to be active existed before the Great Depression. This skirts the first 10 years of hardship in Germany from the end of WWI until the Depression itself.
::If you don't believe me, here is an article from [http://www.welt.de/print-welt/article359035/Hitler_zahlte_keine_Einkommensteuer.html Die Welt]. Hitler was not a struggling artist. First, he claimed at the tax office that his occupation was writer, and not artist. Second, he wasn't exactly struggling. In 1925 the taxation office got suspicious when Hitler bought a luxury car for RM 20.000. While he claimed to have had an annual income between somewhere between RM 11.000 and RM 19.000 during those golden years. Apparently he didn't report all of his income, because he managed to incur a tax debt of RM 400.000 until he got into power. You need to earn quite a bit, if you can incur that much tax debt. Needless to say that this debt was waived when he came into power. Anyway, he wasn't struggling, but claimed to have an income worth half a luxury car a year, while in just a few years he managed to amass a tax debt worth 20 luxury cars. I don't call that struggling.
:* Even if your section was perfect, the idea that you see nothing wrong with the section that requires reversion misses the point of the proper way to discuss and implement changes. But that is already discussed above so I will leave it at that. [[User:Learn together|Learn together]] 04:54, 28 November 2007 (EST)
:* Even if your section was perfect, the idea that you see nothing wrong with the section that requires reversion misses the point of the proper way to discuss and implement changes. But that is already discussed above so I will leave it at that. [[User:Learn together|Learn together]] 04:54, 28 November 2007 (EST)
::I saw quite some mistakes and omissions myself, and was and still am happy to cooperate. And you might have noticed that quite a few of your sentences survived my changes and additions. None of mine were kept in your reversions. And i saw nothing wrong inserting bits from other articles that are already on CP. Sorry, if that was wrong, but I figured that citing other articles on CP, wouldn't be problematic. [[User:Order|Order]] 08:38, 28 November 2007 (EST)
Perhaps one (or both?) of you need(s) to reread [[Help:Editing Etiquette|Editing Etiquette]]. [[User:Philip J. Rayment|Philip J. Rayment]] 20:37, 27 November 2007 (EST)
Perhaps one (or both?) of you need(s) to reread [[Help:Editing Etiquette|Editing Etiquette]]. [[User:Philip J. Rayment|Philip J. Rayment]] 20:37, 27 November 2007 (EST)