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There are some weaknesses in this article, which I will attempt to improve. Statements to the effect that "music can be the most dangerous art form, when misused" are unverifiable and highly debatable. It comes across not unlike those old warnings that "negroid dance rhythms" would corrupt the nation's youth. Biblical references are fine, but in their own section and not the opening paragraph. I'll write more here when I'm done. [[User:Eoinc|Eoinc]] 11:03, 4 May 2008 (EDT)
There are some weaknesses in this article, which I will attempt to improve. Statements to the effect that "music can be the most dangerous art form, when misused" are unverifiable and highly debatable. It comes across not unlike those old warnings that "negroid dance rhythms" would corrupt the nation's youth. Biblical references are fine, but in their own section and not the opening paragraph. I'll write more here when I'm done. [[User:Eoinc|Eoinc]] 11:03, 4 May 2008 (EDT)
: You also said in your edit comment that you removed "unsourced" material, but the material you removed had a source (which you also removed)! I can sense a reversion coming. [[User:Philip J. Rayment|Philip J. Rayment]] 11:20, 4 May 2008 (EDT)
: You also said in your edit comment that you removed "unsourced" material, but the material you removed had a source (which you also removed)! I can sense a reversion coming. [[User:Philip J. Rayment|Philip J. Rayment]] 11:20, 4 May 2008 (EDT)
: I've moved the Bible section because of poor positioning (see my edit comment), but what was wrong with it where it was? It was under history, and it was talking about the history, so it's original position seems to me to have been entirely appropriate. [[User:Philip J. Rayment|Philip J. Rayment]] 11:44, 4 May 2008 (EDT)