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*[continued]"and human rights"

*[continued]"and human rights"

The first one should be easy enough, but it still wouldn't hurt to either be more specific or to point at a source. But the last two claims made me go "Wha-?" because they pretty much come out of nowhere (and then again leave into nowhere). I figure you're a smart guy and based those claims on good sources, so this is just a request to include them in the interest of the reader. Right now, the intro paragraph sounds a lot like an abstract or summary without the rest of the undoubtedly wow-ing article: It's concise and certainly gets a point across, but people can't help but feel that they're missing something. And since the points touched here aren't really picked up in the article, they're left wanting. --[[User:Jenkins|Jenkins]] 14:03, 6 October 2007 (EDT)

The first one should be easy enough, but it still wouldn't hurt to either be more specific or to point at a source. But the last two claims made me go "Wha-?" because they pretty much come out of nowhere (and then again leave into nowhere). I figure you're a smart guy and based those claims on good sources, so this is just a request to include them in the interest of the reader. Right now, the intro paragraph sounds a lot like an abstract or summary without the rest of the undoubtedly wow-ing article: It's concise and certainly gets a point across, but people can't help but feel that they're missing something. And since the points touched here aren't really picked up in the article, they're left wanting. --[[User:Jenkins|Jenkins]] 14:03, 6 October 2007 (EDT)