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run-on sentence.
Tillman was not a conservative, he was, in fact, an Athiest, and liberal democrat who encouraged others to vote for John Kerry in the 2004 election, and was disappointed when the war in Iraq began, which he felt was unjust. [http://www.thenation.com/doc/20051024/zirin] I don't think this makes him any less of a hero, however. --[[User:LarryL|LarryL]] 22:01, 27 April 2009 (EDT)
Tillman was not a conservative, he was, in fact, an Athiest, and liberal democrat who encouraged others to vote for John Kerry in the 2004 election, and was disappointed when the war in Iraq began, which he felt was unjust. [http://www.thenation.com/doc/20051024/zirin] I don't think this makes him any less of a hero, however. --[[User:LarryL|LarryL]] 22:01, 27 April 2009 (EDT)
==Grammar issue==
Not sure why this article is locked for editing? Anyway, in the first section, the sentence ''After the terrorists attacks of 9/11, he gave up a lucrative NFL career with the Arizona Cardinals to fight for his country as an Army Ranger, he died fighting in Afghanistan.'' has a grammar error. The last comma could be a semi-colon, or the phrase '', he died fighting in Afghanistan.'' could be made into a separate sentence: ''. He died fighting in Afghanistan.''--[[User:Hsmom|Hsmom]] 23:28, 27 April 2009 (EDT)