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Gospel of Mark (Translated) (view source)
Revision as of 16:01, September 27, 2009
, 16:01, September 27, 2009→Chapter 6: first two verses, with issues for improvement
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|And he went out from thence, and came into his own country; and his disciples follow him.
|And he went out from thence, and came into his own country; and his disciples follow him.
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|Jesus then traveled home, followed by his disciples.
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|traveled? Is "home" too narrow?
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|And when the sabbath day was come, he began to teach in the synagogue: and many hearing him were astonished, saying, From whence hath this man these things? and what wisdom is this which is given unto him, that even such mighty works are wrought by his hands?
|And when the sabbath day was come, he began to teach in the synagogue: and many hearing him were astonished, saying, From whence hath this man these things? and what wisdom is this which is given unto him, that even such mighty works are wrought by his hands?
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|On the next Sabbath, Jesus began teaching in the synagogue. Many who listened were astonished and declared, "How does this man know so much? What kind of wisdom has been given to Him, enabling Him to perform such wonderful deeds?
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|"wonderful" better than "great"; avoid "miracle" as a non-believer expression? Keep "man" to avoid emasculating Christianity.
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==Chapter 7==
==Chapter 7==