: I nearly reverted your changes to the introduction, thinking that the new wording was a tad awkward and was getting into criticism before description, but the more I thought about it, the more I concluded that your wording was better than what was there before. I still think it could be improved, but that might come with the expansion and taking a rather different approach to the introduction. | : I nearly reverted your changes to the introduction, thinking that the new wording was a tad awkward and was getting into criticism before description, but the more I thought about it, the more I concluded that your wording was better than what was there before. I still think it could be improved, but that might come with the expansion and taking a rather different approach to the introduction. |