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And so forth. In my linguistics class, we talked about semantic satiation, and I believe that paragraphs like these, along with the fact that it never seems to use pronouns, somewhat diminish the readability of the article. If I were to make this change, I would preserve every wikilink, reference, etc, but I believe it would become more readable. In Christ, [[User:Tzoran|Tyler Zoran]] <sup>[[User talk:Tzoran|Talk]]</sup> 09:09, 6 May 2010 (EDT)
And so forth. In my linguistics class, we talked about semantic satiation, and I believe that paragraphs like these, along with the fact that it never seems to use pronouns, somewhat diminish the readability of the article. If I were to make this change, I would preserve every wikilink, reference, etc, but I believe it would become more readable. In Christ, [[User:Tzoran|Tyler Zoran]] <sup>[[User talk:Tzoran|Talk]]</sup> 09:09, 6 May 2010 (EDT)
:I'd agree, it seems kind of clumsy to keep using the full name, especially that many times in a small segment. Particularly that first sentence uses "Barack Obama" three times. Reminds me of that Al Gore joke from the Simpsons, where he keeps referring to himself in the third person. Someone should throw some pronouns in there. --[[User:Dzugavili|Dzugavili]] 19:18, 6 May 2010 (EDT)
== Insults? ==
== Insults? ==
Does the entire beginning of the article have to be so laden with insults? Couldnt it simply say what the article will be about, and THEN express views? As it is it appears very unprofessional. 19:11, 6 May 2010 (EDT)
Does the entire beginning of the article have to be so laden with insults? Couldnt it simply say what the article will be about, and THEN express views? As it is it appears very unprofessional. 19:11, 6 May 2010 (EDT)