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== A couple of suggestions ==
Good start! However, these are some changes I'd make to improve the article:
1. Point one and seven are redundant; I'd remove point 1 completely, and make point 7 the new point n.1. In addition, point 7 should be rephrased in my opinion, to avoid repetitions.
2. In point two, a sentence could be added stating how the encouragement of personal enterprise and ingenuity normally leads to more advanced scientific progress. If you expand on it, it could be made a separate point altogether.
I didn't make the changes myself as I am not the original author of this article and I wanted to have some feedback first :) --[[User:MarcoT|MarcoT]] 16:19, 1 June 2010 (EDT)
Good start! However, these are some changes I'd make to improve the article:
1. Point one and seven are redundant; I'd remove point 1 completely, and make point 7 the new point n.1. In addition, point 7 should be rephrased in my opinion, to avoid repetitions.
2. In point two, a sentence could be added stating how the encouragement of personal enterprise and ingenuity normally leads to more advanced scientific progress. If you expand on it, it could be made a separate point altogether.
I didn't make the changes myself as I am not the original author of this article and I wanted to have some feedback first :) --[[User:MarcoT|MarcoT]] 16:19, 1 June 2010 (EDT)