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Part A

Part A

1.The best vegetible is Asparagus. But in public schools most kids eat candy rather then good food. Eating better will make you healthier then them.

1.The best vegetible is Asparagus. But in public schools most kids eat candy rather then good food. Eating better will make you healthier then them.

The best vegetable is asparagus. In public schools, most kids eat candy rather than healthy food. Eating better will make you healthier than the kids in public school.

The best vegetable is asparagus. In public schools, most kids eat candy rather than healthy food. Eating better will make you healthier than the kids in public school.

2.Congres's problem it is to weak. Worrying so much about what the public think, Washington D.C. does us all a diservice.

2.Congres's problem it is to weak. Worrying so much about what the public think, Washington D.C. does us all a diservice.

The problem with Congress is that it is too weak. Washington D.C. does us all a disservice by worrying too much about public opinion.

The problem with Congress is that it is too weak. Washington D.C. does us all a disservice by worrying too much about public opinion.

3.The most unique day of the year is Easter. Lets face it; neither July 4th or New Years Day are as special of a day.

3.The most unique day of the year is Easter. Lets face it; neither July 4th or New Years Day are as special of a day.

Easter is an unique day of the year. Let us face it; neither July 4th nor New Years Day are as special.

Easter is an unique day of the year. Let us face it; neither July 4th nor New Years Day are as special.

4.Someone needs to clean up this mess, and they had better do it before the owner gets here. “Get you're garbage out of hear now,” he wrote in a note.

4.Someone needs to clean up this mess, and they had better do it before the owner gets here. “Get you're garbage out of hear now,” he wrote in a note.

Someone needs to clean up this mess before the owner returns. “Get you're (sic) garbage out of hear (sic) now!” he wrote.

Someone needs to clean up this mess before the owner returns. “Get you're (sic) garbage out of hear (sic) now!” he wrote.

5.I am detirmined to catch all the errors this time.........I am not going to make any more mistakes no more! Do you think I like being rideculed like this?

5.I am detirmined to catch all the errors this time.........I am not going to make any more mistakes no more! Do you think I like being rideculed like this?

I am determined to catch all the errors this time. I am not going to make any more mistakes! Do you think that I like to be ridiculed like this?

I am determined to catch all the errors this time. I am not going to make any more mistakes! Do you think that I like to be ridiculed like this?

6.These two things I know are true; good writing is priceless, and poor writing will hurt your career. That is why I want to be a better writter than him.

6.These two things I know are true; good writing is priceless, and poor writing will hurt your career. That is why I want to be a better writter than him.

I know that these two things are true; good writing is priceless, and poor writing will hurt your career. This is why I want to be a better writer than him.

I know that these two things are true; good writing is priceless, and poor writing will hurt your career. This is why I want to be a better writer than him.

Part B Essay

Part B Essay