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Politicians can be very dishonest people. Among the worst of the dishonest politicians are Bill Clinton, and Anthony Weiner. Anthony Weiner was a poor role model and Congressman. He posted a humiliating, offensive, and immoral photo of himself on his public Twitter account so that everyone could see it. It was apparently addressed to a young college student as a "joke"; it would be a joke his wife would be very angry about! Say a child followed Weiner's Twitter account and thought it was neat saying that "Look, I'm following my Congressman's Twitter account," and be offended by seeing the atrocious photo. He lied about the photo, saying his account was hacked, and many in the public believed him. Comedians such as Jon Stewart gave him a pass on the scandal, not mentioning it at all or simply taking it easy on the man; if a Republican would have been doing something like that, he would be having a field day mocking the politician. This shows the comfort these Democratic politicians have in the mainstream media. He was eventually found out, and not removed from Congress; he resigned and continued to receive monies and benefits from the government.  

Politicians can be very dishonest people. Among the worst of the dishonest politicians are Bill Clinton, and Anthony Weiner. Anthony Weiner was a poor role model and Congressman. He posted a humiliating, offensive, and immoral photo of himself on his public Twitter account so that everyone could see it. It was apparently addressed to a young college student as a "joke"; it would be a joke his wife would be very angry about! Say a child followed Weiner's Twitter account and thought it was neat saying that "Look, I'm following my Congressman's Twitter account," and be offended by seeing the atrocious photo. He lied about the photo, saying his account was hacked, and many in the public believed him. Comedians such as Jon Stewart gave him a pass on the scandal, not mentioning it at all or simply taking it easy on the man; if a Republican would have been doing something like that, he would be having a field day mocking the politician. This shows the comfort these Democratic politicians have in the mainstream media. He was eventually found out, and not removed from Congress; he resigned and continued to receive monies and benefits from the government.  

Then take Bill Clinton, the forty-second President of the United States. He was called "Slick Willie" for a reason! He was unfaithful to his wife, engaged in an affair with an intern, and, of course, lied about it. He became the second President to be impeached by the House of Representatives. He was tried in the Senate, but removed, though he admitted to lying about the affair. He also was not significantly criticized in the media, and was not removed from office due to his dishonesty. This shows that the people at large, are deceived by these politicians.

Then take Bill Clinton, the forty-second President of the United States. He was called "Slick Willie" for a reason! He was unfaithful to his wife, engaged in an affair with an intern, and, of course, lied about it. He became the second President to be impeached by the House of Representatives. He was tried in the Senate, but removed, though he admitted to lying about the affair. He also was not significantly criticized  

in the media, and was not removed from office due to his dishonesty. This shows that the people at large, are deceived by these politicians.

 

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It is often safer for parents to keep their children in homes playing these games than going outside due to city crime such as child abuse, gun violence, and bullying. Video games offer a shelter and sanctuary from this. Nonetheless, they cause health problems and can promote anti-social behavior and they may disconnect from parents.

It is often safer for parents to keep their children in homes playing these games than going outside due to city crime such as child abuse, gun violence, and bullying. Video games offer a shelter and sanctuary from this. Nonetheless, they cause health problems and can promote anti-social behavior and they may disconnect from parents.

Violent video games such as the ''Grand Theft Auto'' series promote violence in young boys, and despite an "M" rating, parents buy these sort of games for young children. These children are exposed to crime, immorality, drug abuse, gun violence, and obscene language at a young age. While the ESRB is doing a good thing placing appropriate ratings on such violent games, parents often do not look at these ratings and will unknowingly buy young children these atrocious titles. One who is aware can surely tremble as a parent buys a child ''Mortal Kombat'' for Christmas, and will know that the horrifying content can have a great effect on the well-being of the child! Even Christian churches will have youth group activities where young men will play games like ''Halo''! This ignorance toward game content can promote young men emulating these characters in the violent games they played as children, and has shown links to certain violent behavior promoted recently. The Supreme Court upheld the "free speech" right of an extremely violent and gruesome game as if it were an actual form of speech. Images shown of the game include a beast breaking the body of a woman in half with gore spewing out. Surely one would not want their young child to see this! Nonetheless, this issue is one that will need to be solved by parents to protect the well-being of our children.

Violent video games such as the ''Grand Theft Auto'' series promote violence in young boys, and despite an "M" rating, parents buy these sort of games for young children. These children are exposed to crime, immorality, drug abuse, gun violence, and obscene language at a young age. While the ESRB is doing a good thing placing appropriate ratings on such violent games, parents often do not look at these ratings and will unknowingly buy young children these atrocious titles. One who is aware can surely tremble as a parent buys a child ''Mortal Kombat'' for Christmas, and will know that the horrifying content can have a great effect on the well-being of the child! Even Christian churches will have youth group activities where young men will play games like ''Halo''! This ignorance toward game content can promote [AWKWARD WORDING] young men emulating these characters in the violent games they played as children, and has shown links to certain violent behavior promoted recently. The Supreme Court upheld the "free speech" right of an extremely violent and gruesome game as if it were an actual form of speech. Images shown of the game include a beast breaking the body of a woman in half with gore spewing out. Surely one would not want their young child to see this! Nonetheless, this issue is one that will need to be solved by parents to protect the well-being of our children.