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1.  The best vegetible is Asparagus.  But in public school most kids eat candy rather then good food.  Eating better will make you healthier than them.

1.  The best vegetible is Asparagus.  But in public school most kids eat candy rather then good food.  Eating better will make you healthier than them.

:The best vegetable is asparagus. But in public schools, most kids eat candy rather than good food. Eating more healthy foods will make you healthier than them.

:The best vegetable is asparagus. But in public schools, most kids eat candy rather than good food. Eating more healthy foods will make you healthier than them.

2.  Congres's problem it is to weak.  Worrying so much about what the public think, Washington D.C. does us all a diservice.

2.  Congres's problem it is to weak.  Worrying so much about what the public think, Washington D.C. does us all a diservice.

:Congress's problem is that it is too weak. Worring so much about what the public thinks, Washington D.C. does us all a disservice.

:Congress's problem is that it is too weak. Worring so much about what the public thinks, Washington D.C. does us all a disservice.

3.  The most unique day of the year is Easter.  Lets face it; neither July 4th or New Years Day are as special of a day.

3.  The most unique day of the year is Easter.  Lets face it; neither July 4th or New Years Day are as special of a day.

:The most unique day of the year is Easter. Let's face it: neither July 4th nor New Year's Day are as special as Easter.

:The most unique day of the year is Easter. Let's face it: neither July 4th nor New Year's Day are as special as Easter.

4.  Someone needs to clean up this mess, and they had better do it before the owner gets here.  "Get you're garbage out of hear now," he wrote in a note.

4.  Someone needs to clean up this mess, and they had better do it before the owner gets here.  "Get you're garbage out of hear now," he wrote in a note.

:Someone needs to clean up this mess, and they better do it before the owner gets here "Get you're (sic) garbage out of hear (sic) now," he wrote on a note.

:Someone needs to clean up this mess, and they better do it before the owner gets here "Get you're (sic) garbage out of hear (sic) now," he wrote on a note.

5.  I am detirmined to catch all the errors this time .....  I am not going to make any more mistakes no more! Do you think I like being rideculed like this?

5.  I am detirmined to catch all the errors this time .....  I am not going to make any more mistakes no more! Do you think I like being rideculed like this?

:I am determined to catch all the errors this time..... I am not going to make any more mistakes! Do you think I like being ridiculed?

:I am determined to catch all the errors this time..... I am not going to make any more mistakes! Do you think I like being ridiculed?

6.  These two things i know are true;  good writing is priceless, and poor writing will hurt your career.  That is why I want to be a better writter than him.

6.  These two things i know are true;  good writing is priceless, and poor writing will hurt your career.  That is why I want to be a better writter than him.

:These two things I know are true: good writing is priceless, and poor writing will hurt your career. That is why I want to become a better writer than him.

:These two things I know are true: good writing is priceless, and poor writing will hurt your career. That is why I want to become a better writer than him.

'''Part B''': Emphasizing strong openings to clear, separate paragraphs, and using at least one new vocabulary word that you've never used in an essay before, write an essay of at least 700 words on one of the following:

'''Part B''': Emphasizing strong openings to clear, separate paragraphs, and using at least one new vocabulary word that you've never used in an essay before, write an essay of at least 700 words on one of the following:

The nanny state would rather ban McDonald's food rather than let people decide what to eat. If people want to eat fast food, let them. If they want large portions, and if McDonald's is willing to sell large portions, the people should get their large portions.

The nanny state would rather ban McDonald's food rather than let people decide what to eat. If people want to eat fast food, let them. If they want large portions, and if McDonald's is willing to sell large portions, the people should get their large portions.

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