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::: Physical fitness is a good thing. Mental fitness would be even better. I don't see how the alternatives would be improvements.--[[User:Aschlafly|Aschlafly]] 19:38, 19 October 2008 (EDT) | ::: Physical fitness is a good thing. Mental fitness would be even better. I don't see how the alternatives would be improvements.--[[User:Aschlafly|Aschlafly]] 19:38, 19 October 2008 (EDT) | ||
| + | ::::Right now it reads as if our society thrives off the quantifying of physical fitness, not off the actual physical fitness. I understand your point, but it is hidden within the second half of your second sentence. Perhaps a better way of saying it would be "Our society thrives on our physical fitness and mental fitness. To help us improve our physical fitness, we quantify our physical strength [then the list of how we do it]. It is long overdue to create a similar system for mental fitness: ----[[User:ToJones|ToJones]] 19:42, 19 October 2008 (EDT) | ||
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Do you think "excels" might be a better word than "thrives" in the opening line? Corry 11:20, 19 October 2008 (EDT)
- How about "is obsessed with"? Human 19:23, 19 October 2008 (EDT)
- Maybe "delights?" --ToJones 19:25, 19 October 2008 (EDT)
- Physical fitness is a good thing. Mental fitness would be even better. I don't see how the alternatives would be improvements.--Aschlafly 19:38, 19 October 2008 (EDT)
- Right now it reads as if our society thrives off the quantifying of physical fitness, not off the actual physical fitness. I understand your point, but it is hidden within the second half of your second sentence. Perhaps a better way of saying it would be "Our society thrives on our physical fitness and mental fitness. To help us improve our physical fitness, we quantify our physical strength [then the list of how we do it]. It is long overdue to create a similar system for mental fitness: ----ToJones 19:42, 19 October 2008 (EDT)
- Physical fitness is a good thing. Mental fitness would be even better. I don't see how the alternatives would be improvements.--Aschlafly 19:38, 19 October 2008 (EDT)