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1. The best vegetable is asparagus. Most of the kids in public school eat candy, rather than good food; eating better will make you healthier than them.  

1. The best vegetable is asparagus. Most of the kids in public school eat candy, rather than good food; eating better will make you healthier than them.  

2. Congress’s problem:  it is too weak. Those in Washington D.C. worry too much about what the public thinks, consequently doing us all a disservice.  

2. Congress’s problem:  it is too weak. Those in Washington D.C. worry too much about what the public thinks, consequently doing us all a disservice.  

3. Easter is a unique day of the year. Let’s face it; neither July 4th nor New Year’s Day are as special.  

3. Easter is a unique day of the year. Let’s face it; neither July 4th nor New Year’s Day are as special.  

4. Someone needs to clean up this mess before the owner gets here.  His note read, "Get [your] garbage out of [here] now”.  

4. Someone needs to clean up this mess before the owner gets here.  His note read, "Get [your] garbage out of [here] now”.  

5. I am determined to catch all of the errors this time; I am not going to make any more mistakes.  Do you think I enjoy being ridiculed like this?  

5. I am determined to catch all of the errors this time; I am not going to make any more mistakes.  Do you think I enjoy being ridiculed like this?  

6. These two things I know are true: good writing is priceless and poor writing will hurt my career. That is why I want to be a better writer.

6. These two things I know are true: good writing is priceless and poor writing will hurt my career. That is why I want to be a better writer.

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