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::Can you reword it so the reader would ''like'' to eat pork? --[[User:Ed Poor|Ed Poor]] 12:32, 24 May 2007 (EDT)
::Can you reword it so the reader would ''like'' to eat pork? --[[User:Ed Poor|Ed Poor]] 12:32, 24 May 2007 (EDT)
Actually, I overused the word carcass, thanks for pointing it out as it seemed a bit repetative. Used some friendlier similes, let me know if any more of it needs rewording [[User:Fingermouse|Fingermouse]] 12:33, 24 May 2007 (EDT)